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my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Thread Started on Oct 26, 2009, 5:05am »

OOC(THIS IS MY FIRST ROLE PLAY)
evan down vs training bot
Evans music starts to play as a black figure appears through the smoke and he flips his hood up, then the smoke fades away and then just standing on the top of the ramp is no other than EVAN DOWN.The crowd go mental and start cheering for the high flying hero as he flips his hood down and makes his way down the ramp clapping the crowds hands.
~ANNOUNCER~
ladies and gentlemen, now weighing in at 225lbs hailing from Detroit, Michigan the HIGH FLYING HERO evan DOWN!!!!!!!!
A platform lowers to the ring carring a robot.
DING-DING-DING
the bell rings signaling the start of the match.
~ANNOUNCER~
The following match is a 1- on - 1 hardcoreeee match

Evan and the bot lock up and the bot somehow over powers evan and Irish whips him but evan ducks the clothesline and spears the bot down to the floor and evan goes and gets some weapons such as a ladder a table and thumbtacks and liquid fluid.
Evan sets up the ladder in the ring and throughs the bot into the turnbuckle and goes to hit the bot with the ladder but the bot got down from the turnbuckle and then spears evan down to the canvas and as evan is getting up the bot has a steel chair and he hits evan round the face with it.
Evan got straight back up and finally hit the bot with the ladder. Evan then sets up the ladder and then sets up the table with barbed wire wrapped around it and evan spilt the thumbtacks and liquid fluid all over the table.The bot starts running at Evan but Evan then gauntlet smashes the bot. Evan then layes the bot on the table and sets it a light and evan then climbs the ladder and starts taunting to the crowd.

to be judged

ooc(this took me 15Min's and in a proppa rp IL add comentry)( i know its short but i didn't want to over run it)

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Re: my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Reply #1 on Oct 26, 2009, 5:15am »

First Problem

~ANNOUNCER~
The following match is a 1- on - 1 hardcoreeee match

This sentence should come before your wrestler's introduction.

Second Problem and Major Problem

Your description of moves like spear suck to the core.

If you want to get better then try to read Action posts Of Vlad, MD, Desperado, Hayden, Jake and many good RPers are here

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Re: my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Reply #2 on Oct 26, 2009, 5:21am »

k thxs for the advice steve

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Re: my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Reply #3 on Oct 26, 2009, 5:40am »

Evan, I think I've told you to PM some of the veterans around to get yourself with this match based Roleplays. But, then again, this isn't the kind of stuff we expect out here. So go on, ask someone for a proper training. You're not ready.

Lastly, don't go crazy as people might go harsh on you since this wasn't really a proper roleplay. Don't flame or fight around as we're sick and tired of those.

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Re: my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Reply #4 on Oct 26, 2009, 5:48am »

kk il ask vlad wen hes not bussie

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Re: my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Reply #5 on Oct 26, 2009, 5:52am »

ill give ya a match,Havent had one in ages

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Re: my 1st RP (Evan down vs training bot)
« Reply #6 on Oct 26, 2009, 7:51am »

OK,I have entered and starting again since I am not a robot.......

The bell signals and then XDT and Evan Down pace towards each other and lock arms, trying to over power each other. After continuously trying to get the better of each other,They finally quit trying and go straight in for hand-to hand. XDT uses his right fist to land a hook in Evan Down's stomach as he clutches his stomach.Taking advantage of the situation,XDT uses his right fist again for a punch in the mouth and clobbers him a second time, But with his left fist. The strike lets Evan get vertical again as he tries a bit of offense on his own. XDT bounces off the ropes and goes for a jumping clothesline on Evan Down, But Evan ducks and XDT goes flying off the other set of ropes. Evan sees him coming back and lands a great leaping dropkick to the jaw of XDT, As a mighty crack is heard.

Jimmy P:That was a massive dropkick landed by Evan Down,as XDT drops flat to the floor and I don't think he'll be getting up from that one any time soon!

Ray W:You can say that again Jim!I just love finely tund athletes go head to head like this, It is sure to cause some amazing results!

Evan Down gets up from his flying dropkick as XDT is still groaning in pain on the floor,Clutching his jaw and rolling around.Evan takes no pity on him though as he goes back to him and grabs his head and pulls him back to his feet.He then pulls his body back and stretches his hand out,And then flings his arm towards XDT and uses his hand to perform a Knife Edge Chop right to his upper chest.A (WOOOOOOO) is heard echoing throughout the arena as the chop lands on XDT and he falls back.Evan down follows up with a standing clothesline that knocks XDT flat on his back and quickly after Evan follows up with a few sharp elbow drops.

Jimmy P: Those elbows have got to hurt, Ray!They are landing him square in the forehead and he looks in pain from them!

Ray W:But look,Evan was going for another elbow drop,But XDT rolled out of the way just in time and he's getting up!

Jimmy P:Yes,But so is Evan again! This is going to be a good match to call!

XDT is back on his feet and Evan is on all fours,trying to get up.XDT charges at him and goes for a punt to the chest,But Evan moves. He then gets up, But XDT is first to the punch as he grapples him and hooks his arm over his head.He then lifts him overhead so Evan is vertical on XDT's shoulders.XDT then falls back gracefully as the impact of the suplex hits the mat.XDT then flops backwards for the pin....

1!

2!

KICKOUT!

Jimmy P:A great kickout by Evan Down as XDT quickly gets up,Not bothering to rest to regain stamina!

Ray W: Great match so far,I wonder what other surprises are in store for us!I sure can't wait to find out!

As XDT is up,Evan is still on his back on the mat,And XDT comes up to him.He then hooks Evan's legs and tucks them underneath his armpits. Then,With a struggle he flips Evan over onto his stomach while he is sitting on Evan's back.He then pulls back Evan's legs and applies the boston crab and is pulling with every inch of power he's got to try and get Evan to tap out.....

Jimmy P:Damn!You can see Evan is under excruciating pain from that Boston Crab, Expertly applied by XDT!He makes it look like he's been practicing submissions every second of his life!

Ray W:Damn right he does and he makes them look so good as well!He knows ways to loosen your tongue with his submissions,He'll have no problem getting most people to tap out!

Jimmy P: Evan must have some extraodinary willpower,Because he's managing to sgand the pain,Let alone fight it! He's getting onto his hands and he's wrapped his legs around XDT's throat,He's turned his own submission against him!

As Evan squeezes his legs around XDT's throat, You can see XDT's face turning red,from both struggling and trying to keep his breath going. He manages to get his arms under control as he grips onto Evan's shins. He then rips them apart from his throat,Trying to not suffocate. He then manages to get Evan off full time,And tosses his halfway across the ring. He lays on the mat for a bit,Trying to get oxygen back into his system,Then leaps up to his feet to cheers from the crowd for this match....

Jimmy P:And according to the fans,This match is turning out to be a great one,And I don't think they're wrong!This is a great match for these two beginners!

XDT storms over to Evan Down and gives him a boot right in the abdomen.Evan yelps out in pain as XDT delivers a second boot,This time,To the shoulder.XDT then grabs ahold of Evan's head and lifts him to his feet.He then hooks his own head underneath Evan's arm. nd just s he is about to throw him overhead for a belly-to-belly suplex,Evan takes control an just takes advantage,Just flops to the floor,Delivering a DDT square to the face of XDT.His face is now red after being slammed to the mat and Evan flips him over and tries for the pin.....

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2!

TBC

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